Wednesday, April 25, 2007

Poetry Thursday 4/26/07

I apologize. This is my first attempt at participating in PoetryThursday. If I'm lucky, I'll survive for next week's effort.

The Villanelle.

Just so you know--I honestly thought this "assignment" would kill me. But I'm still here to tell about it. At some point I felt so harassed by the form that I thought I had succeeded in making some sort of sense. But in the clear light of day I'm not so sure.

For starters, here's a germane quote from my
dear fellow asthmatic Robert Louis Stevenson: "To travel hopefully is a better thing than to arrive, and the true success is to labour." Thanks, Robert. That certainly applied.

Well, here goes!


Success: A Villanelle in an Archaic Style

There's little to be said for undue stress,
yet there's great flavor in a goodly gain.
They say nothing succeeds quite like success.

Conceit and vanity call for redress,
and tax falls heavy on a lord's demesne.
There's little to be said for undue stress.

To those with no compunction to oppress--
with limitless ambition to unrein--
They say nothing succeeds quite like success.

Great wrongs the great eventually confess,
but none's enough to drive them to abstain.
There's little to be said for undue stress.

A lack of motive leads to frugalness,
and parsimony pocketbooks constrains.
They say nothing succeeds quite like success.

Greedy or humble, why indulge excess?
In moderation, sacred or profane,
there's little to be said for undue stress.
They say nothing succeeds quite like success.

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6 Comments:

At 4/26/2007 1:56 PM, Blogger Marilyn said...

This is my first Poetry Thursday too, but I've been struggling with this form for a while. I think you did a great job! I really like the sound of it and the fact that it's the sort of thing I could dig into over and over.

 
At 4/26/2007 6:39 PM, Blogger Remiman said...

Sputnik,
First attempt or 100th, I think you've got it!
Well done.
"They say nothing succeeds quite like success." ;-)
rel

 
At 4/27/2007 4:35 AM, Blogger Rob Kistner said...

"They say nothing succeeds quite like success"...

Hey! Didn't you plagiarize that from Pop Culture?

Pop lives just 'round the bend from me with Mom, and all the little Cultures.

;)

--and so it goes--
...Rob

 
At 4/27/2007 9:13 AM, Blogger Neil said...

I really like this form of poetry and I totally got what you said. I love the musical nature. I think you might have some rock song lyrics here.

 
At 4/27/2007 12:29 PM, Blogger Rob Kistner said...

In my earlier feeble attempt at humor I forgot my main reason for posting a comment was to say well done on you villanelle - so...

Well done!

--and so it goes--
...Rob

 
At 4/28/2007 11:57 AM, Blogger gautami tripathy said...

As a first attempt it is very good. You have got the hang of it.

 

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